2. Alt: we stared at john. He leaned right straight back inside the chair and grabbed a weapon through the countertop. “Don’t move.”
3. proper method: I stared at john. He leaned right straight back in their chair and grabbed a weapon through the counter. “Don’t move,” he stated.
just just What I’m doing is saying a topic at the beginning of a phrase (john. He.) then, by using their actions having a comma and quotes, it is thought he’s the one speaking. Maybe you have seen this before? Or perhaps is this simply me personally. We don’t think it is grammatically proper.
Of this examples you provided, I’d prefer variation 2. Continue reading “1. My method: we stared at john. He leaned straight right straight back inside the chair and grabbed a weapon through the countertop, “don’t move.””